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they do if its an auto case. Contrib or comparative play a ...
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Your sentence doesn't even say that A and B saw C and D, jus...
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i thought about breaking it up -- it worse because it puts e...
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Ah m, okay. For some reason I assumed that D was the main pe...
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C and D are both involved. I continue to use the term "...
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"at this time" ROFL
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Need to clarify at some point whether A or B were actually d...
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Yeah I just worked with the isolated sentence in question b/...
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A and B passed D and C, who was driving.
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doesn't it need "D's car"
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it says he was driving, which means an automobile. if y...
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Were A and B both at the wheel?
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:48 AM
Author: Nudist Institution

As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C and containing D as a passenger.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376133)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:57 AM
Author: medicated yellow kitchen goal in life

"C was seen driving in the X area, with D as a passenger, by both A and B."

(no one gives a fuck whether A and B were driving or doing a standing 69 at the time they saw these faggots)

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376836)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 12:01 PM
Author: godawful galvanic house

they do if its an auto case. Contrib or comparative play a role potentially. Better to keep it clean.



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376873)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 2:10 PM
Author: concupiscible corn cake digit ratio

Your sentence doesn't even say that A and B saw C and D, just that they passed them.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42377665)



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Date: May 2nd, 2021 12:40 PM
Author: Bearded Cruise Ship Community Account

As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C which contained D as a passenger.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42386999)



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Date: February 25th, 2022 1:42 PM
Author: vivacious boiling water whorehouse
Subject: Quick fixxx

As A and B were driving in X, they passed a car driven by C containing D as a passenger.

EDIT: LMAO at the date

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#44032731)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:52 AM
Author: Onyx dragon

“As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C. D was a passenger in C’s car at the time.”

Would break up the sentences. Your original sentence isn’t terrible though.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376145)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:53 AM
Author: purple knife national



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376148)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:55 AM
Author: Nudist Institution

i thought about breaking it up -- it worse because it puts emphasis on "D was a passenger in C’s car at this time" -- which is a minor detail.

it doesn't really matter whether C or D is the driver.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376159)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:56 AM
Author: Onyx dragon

Ah m, okay. For some reason I assumed that D was the main person.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376166)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:03 AM
Author: Nudist Institution

C and D are both involved. I continue to use the term "C's car" for clarity

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376201)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:51 AM
Author: medicated yellow kitchen goal in life

"at this time"

ROFL

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376807)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:54 AM
Author: godawful galvanic house

Need to clarify at some point whether A or B were actually driving. Or were they in two separate cars, both of which passed C.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376155)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:55 AM
Author: Onyx dragon

Yeah I just worked with the isolated sentence in question b/c I didn’t know what the surrounding sentences are like.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376160)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:04 AM
Author: godawful galvanic house

You can do it in another sentence, but it's going to be important to be clear who was driving in the passing car.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376205)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:55 AM
Author: Burgundy Idiot Pit

While driving in the X area, A & B passed a car that C was driving with a passenger, D.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376157)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:57 AM
Author: Tan Indecent Theater



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376168)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:58 AM
Author: Pearl water buffalo associate

As A and B were driving separately in the X area, they passed a car driven by C which contained D as a passenger.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376174)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:59 AM
Author: Buff multi-colored piazza feces

This suggestion isn't meant to be used word for word, just generally to give you the right idea on how to handle this sort of thing, please develop as part of an exercise in your own development as a lawyer. Really need to break this into clauses that explain everything.

As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C and containing D as a passenger.

WHEREAS A, B, C, and D are human persons domiciled in Jurisdiction Y

WHEREAS X is a certain area in Jurisdiction Y

WHEREAS A, B, and C are legally authorized to operate motor vehicles ("cars" and each individual such vehicle a "car")

WHEREAS on that certain date, A, B, and C were operating cars.

WHEREAS on that certain date, D was a passenger in the car operated by C.

Now, therefore be it resolved, on that certain date, the aforementioned cars traversed on intersecting paths in Area X.

[I assume by "passed" you mean "passed" as in "they passed by each other while headed in different directions," revise if you mean they were going the same way and A/B's cars passed/overtook C's car.]

Please handle and recirculate, thanks.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376176)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:03 AM
Author: Nudist Institution



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376203)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:45 AM
Author: irradiated brilliant rigpig



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376392)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:08 AM
Author: Spectacular silver stain church building



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:25 AM
Author: Rebellious floppy trailer park



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376657)



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Date: May 4th, 2022 12:40 PM
Author: sexy duck-like pocket flask chapel

Very clear, no ambiguity, reads like 1st order logic, I like it.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#44453959)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:59 AM
Author: Talented impressive fortuitous meteor sneaky criminal

As A and B entered the X area, they looked at each other, and although none of them said a word, they understood each other perfectly. It was X area after all. Are there any Xs around, they wondered? They passed a beaten-up vehicle with ridiculous oversized chromed wheels with C as a driver and D as a passenger. X's! - thought A and B. C and D did not think anything. They were high.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376178)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:36 AM
Author: Magenta bisexual brunch alpha



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:37 AM
Author: Aquamarine cracking milk cuckold



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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:59 AM
Author: Spruce adventurous stage

FRIENDLESS FAGGOT BIRDSHIT A was driving some FAGgOt BIRdshit car alone(some other NIFmGGA was drivomg alone in another car) they passed ALPHA TURD C , who has MANY DRINKING BUDDIES, SO NATURALLY HAD A PASSENGER (most likely an AZNgirl getting wet for MAMMOTH TURDCOCK)

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376183)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:00 AM
Author: Garnet bonkers chad



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376187)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:01 AM
Author: Buff multi-colored piazza feces



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376195)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:18 AM
Author: Motley chestnut state really tough guy



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376249)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:47 AM
Author: crimson beady-eyed nursing home



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376406)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:36 AM
Author: emerald sandwich legend



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:37 AM
Author: irradiated brilliant rigpig



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Date: April 30th, 2021 12:32 PM
Author: splenetic abode depressive



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Date: May 1st, 2021 12:19 AM
Author: Garnet bonkers chad



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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:59 AM
Author: Garnet bonkers chad

As A and B were sucking each other’s cocks in the XXX area, C drove by with D cumming in his ass.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376184)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:00 AM
Author: purple knife national

i think you nailed it.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376191)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 3:36 PM
Author: shaky racy ticket booth pervert



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:00 AM
Author: purple knife national

i hope everyone appreciates the mental illness being performed right now.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376189)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:28 AM
Author: cerebral opaque school



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:01 AM
Author: Ungodly philosopher-king property

A and B passed D and C, who was driving.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376194)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:37 AM
Author: Boyish hateful library



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:52 AM
Author: medicated yellow kitchen goal in life

sounds like a riddle

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376816)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:01 AM
Author: Cowardly background story church

i hate this crap

As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed by D driving with C.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376197)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:05 AM
Author: Nudist Institution

i wish this works and it sounds nice but it seems slightly off

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376206)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:06 AM
Author: Cowardly background story church

As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed by D (who was driving with C).

This is it

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376211)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:07 AM
Author: Nudist Institution

doesn't it need "D's car"

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376216)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:42 AM
Author: Cowardly background story church

it says he was driving, which means an automobile.

if you think specifying what kind of automobile is a key detail then can add that

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376370)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:05 AM
Author: godawful galvanic house

Why do you need B, assuming A was driving. Don't say B was driving. Ever. If he wasnt.

As A was driving, they passed ...

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376208)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:06 AM
Author: Diverse crackhouse

you have to make it more exciting. keep the reader interested.

"Where did this take place? In X. And what happened in X? A and B were together in a car. And what did that car do? Why it passed by another car, a car driven by C. And was C alone in that second car? No, no C was not. C was with D. That's right. A and B passed C and D. It's all true."

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376212)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:08 AM
Author: Startling rehab pistol

Were A and B both at the wheel?

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376217)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:13 AM
Author: purple knife national

turns out it was a tandem bicycle.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376233)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:20 AM
Author: Boyish hateful library



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376607)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:18 AM
Author: Motley chestnut state really tough guy

As some faggot and his friend were driving in the restricted area, they passed a car driven by a nigger and containing some other faggot as a passenger. Regards, I hope this helps.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376246)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:26 AM
Author: vibrant sanctuary codepig

The two cars passed in X. In one, A was driving B. In the other, C was driving D.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376290)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:29 AM
Author: Ungodly philosopher-king property

star crossed lovers. reads like brokeback mountain

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376306)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:31 AM
Author: vibrant sanctuary codepig

still the best way to do it. He has more than a handful of items to hit: location, two cars, who was each driver and who was each passenger, that they passed.

This does it and leaves no uncertainty at all

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376317)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:34 AM
Author: Onyx dragon



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376330)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:35 AM
Author: Aquamarine cracking milk cuckold

Okay? Wow. Hey. Picture this: Cars A and B. Right? Going through section X. *makes large "X" using forearms* And boom! Right there, they pass car C. *makes "C" using hand* A car which, at the time, was containing D *unzips pants* as a passenger. *pulls cock out of fly* Any questions?

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376331)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:37 AM
Author: Magenta bisexual brunch alpha



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376336)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:40 AM
Author: Contagious Embarrassed To The Bone Elastic Band Garrison

A and B, as was their custom from time to time, were engaged in that most fanciful of modern hobbies, navigation of modern paved roads in a device propelled by an internal combustion engine, whence, they happened to pass by and through the X area. It was delightful that time of year and a welcome respite from their usual tiresome surroundings. And, as fate or chance, or even perhaps the Muses had it, another fellow engaged in the very same hobby happened by. Of course, known to them, and combustion engine navigators the State over, twas C along with D. Both were fair fellows and known to A and B. As custom would insist they happened both to notice and acknowledge each other, hobbyists in the same pursuit as they were.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376358)



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Date: February 22nd, 2022 10:09 AM
Author: Bossy mental disorder



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#44008930)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:44 AM
Author: Bronze tattoo goyim

So, we need to talk about A driving around with B. Here's the thing: they were in X area, and what's problematic is they passed by C—yes, THAT C. C had a passenger at the time, D. Here's why that's not okay.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376389)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:45 AM
Author: wonderful macaca old irish cottage

400 km/h, 450 km/h, 500 km/h, 550 km/h; A could feel the force of the acceleration pressing him against the sport bucket seats of his Turbo Allegra Mk. 2, their soft, well-sourced alcantara cosseting his tightly leather chapped legs, the micromechanical motors within instantaneously adjusting to each minor perturbation in the vehicle's three-axis orientation to keep him perfectly balanced, its SWIFT systems scanning kilometers ahead of them in real-time and predictively modulating the various electromagnetic and anti-kinetic shielding systems in order to protect their passage as they rocketed upward toward the gateway to area X--area X, the Sacred Seat of Cybernetic Heaven, its secrets whispering to the hovels of his birthplace below, beckoning brave boys with the Siren Song: "Come, Unlock Our Treasurehosue of Wonder or Die Trying"; "It's a goddamn marvel--" that was B, his copilot jockey, in the seat beside him--he'd always liked the tech stuff, engineered things were his jig and jive and the natural knack he'd expressed for them had been evident since his Fourth Year when he'd spontaneously programmed a molecular excavator during off time while the rest of the class was at the playground; he and B had been practicing for this for over three years, secretive sessions when the sensor rings slipped from alignment every third week on Sunday for maintena--"we have a fucking BOGEY at 3 o'clock HIGH!" B screamed, interrupting his meditation on the past--the systems of the Allegra were fast, but B was faster and he'd spotted the incoming a split second before the computerized indication of the same: "Warning, SWIFT has detected an intrusion in the third--" he cut off the computer; he knew what he needed to know: C was moving to intercept them in his Outrigger, accompanied by D; they'd planned for this eventuality, both the conflict itself and the psychology of facing your own brother and cousin 45 kilometers up in the air, each precise maneuver tiptoeing on the razor thin edge between life and death, a minute miscalculation capable of throwing you off the wrong side into a fiery midair death--there was something poignant about it, the notion that he could die up here in an instant and to his friends and family in the warrens of Bressville below, toiling through their daily tasks with no comprehension of the enormous aerial pageantry above them, his life could blot out with no greater signifier than a vanishing spot of light in the sky; he banished the thought of this and other things as he shouted in the cockpit "let's smoke these fuckers" and pushed down hard on the throttle, the frame of the Allegra bending, straining, complying with the command as they soared to meet the enemy head on, he and B laughing aloud at the thrill of it all.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376393)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:47 AM
Author: Bronze tattoo goyim

Wow

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376411)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:49 AM
Author: wonderful macaca old irish cottage

I just copied this from a brief.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376419)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:15 AM
Author: crimson beady-eyed nursing home



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376574)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:54 AM
Author: godawful galvanic house

Your stuff is the only stuff from here I share w my wife. Every time, I explain that "It's just lawyers--we get bored at work--yeah, I know, that's what makes it funny--"

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376824)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 1:21 PM
Author: wine underhanded space psychic



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42377415)



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Date: February 22nd, 2022 10:00 AM
Author: Lime razzle-dazzle temple



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#44008886)



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Date: June 22nd, 2022 9:32 AM
Author: ultramarine well-lubricated hairy legs menage



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#44722509)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:51 AM
Author: Tan Indecent Theater



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376432)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:05 AM
Author: Boyish hateful library

titcr.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376504)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:10 AM
Author: wine underhanded space psychic

180

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376531)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:18 AM
Author: irradiated brilliant rigpig



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376589)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:23 AM
Author: shaky racy ticket booth pervert



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376641)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:24 AM
Author: Lime razzle-dazzle temple

holy shit

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376648)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:34 AM
Author: irradiated brilliant rigpig

attn low attention span poasters read this whole thing pls

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376708)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 1:13 PM
Author: Ungodly philosopher-king property

how

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42377366)



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Date: June 22nd, 2022 9:36 AM
Author: splenetic abode depressive



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#44722527)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:35 AM
Author: Buff multi-colored piazza feces



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376711)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 12:00 PM
Author: aromatic alcoholic electric furnace hissy fit



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376866)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 12:01 PM
Author: Saffron bateful sex offender partner



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376872)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 3:27 PM
Author: shaky racy ticket booth pervert



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42378128)



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Date: June 1st, 2021 9:20 PM
Author: aromatic alcoholic electric furnace hissy fit



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42558237)



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Date: February 22nd, 2022 10:00 AM
Author: Lime razzle-dazzle temple



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#44008882)



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Date: February 22nd, 2022 10:05 AM
Author: aromatic alcoholic electric furnace hissy fit

this is incredible

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#44008910)



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Date: February 25th, 2022 1:39 PM
Author: Lime razzle-dazzle temple



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#44032706)



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Date: May 4th, 2022 12:31 PM
Author: Appetizing translucent location shitlib



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#44453902)



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Date: June 22nd, 2022 9:31 AM
Author: ultramarine well-lubricated hairy legs menage

wow

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#44722507)



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Date: June 22nd, 2022 9:34 AM
Author: wine underhanded space psychic



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#44722517)



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Date: June 22nd, 2022 9:44 AM
Author: Laughsome at-the-ready boistinker



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#44722548)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:49 AM
Author: Exhilarant Very Tactful Home

High | level | legal work

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376422)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:28 AM
Author: cerebral opaque school



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376672)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:55 AM
Author: Elite amber boltzmann step-uncle's house

Each of A and B were driving in AREA. They both passed a car driven by C with D as a passenger.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376456)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:05 AM
Author: lake mentally impaired turdskin

A and B passed a car driven by C, who was transporting D as a passenger, as they drove through the X area.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376505)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:07 AM
Author: Hyperactive school cafeteria

two people, a & b, drove past c driving with d in his car.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376517)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:13 AM
Author: Aphrodisiac alcoholic gas station police squad

C and his passenger D were traveling in X area. A overtook and passed them. B overtook and passed them too.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376555)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:19 AM
Author: shivering lascivious friendly grandma

As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C, which contained D as a passenger.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376600)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:24 AM
Author: abusive incel

Haven’t read any of the replies, so someone else may have made the same suggestion, but I’d go with:

While driving in the X area, A & B passed a car containing C (driver) and D (passenger).

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376651)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:27 AM
Author: shaky racy ticket booth pervert

This was basically gromjoh's poast above except his was more concise.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376665)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:34 AM
Author: Lime razzle-dazzle temple



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376704)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:40 AM
Author: Buff multi-colored piazza feces



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376736)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 2:08 PM
Author: wonderful macaca old irish cottage



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42377648)



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Date: February 22nd, 2022 10:01 AM
Author: Lime razzle-dazzle temple



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#44008887)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:33 AM
Author: salmon stag film

writing MFE's, any resources on improving clunky writing? I recently jumped from GOV to tech

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376695)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:33 AM
Author: Buff multi-colored piazza feces

Did you try the hydro hack?

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376699)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:40 AM
Author: Bright misunderstood dingle berry

What’s that

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376738)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:41 AM
Author: Buff multi-colored piazza feces

You should drink more water, you're probably dehydrated. This will, among other things, improve cognitive function and therefore improve your writing. While you're at it also check your posture I bet you're slouching right now.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376746)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:49 AM
Author: irradiated brilliant rigpig



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42376800)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 1:17 PM
Author: Walnut Indirect Expression Resort

Just write in the active voice with short simple sentences, subject verb object. Not hard

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42377389)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 1:16 PM
Author: Walnut Indirect Expression Resort

A and B saw C driving in X

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42377381)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 1:28 PM
Author: charismatic confused casino

andy and brad were driving around brooklyn when they passed carl and dave in their car.

this doesn't define who is driving and who is riding though.



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42377449)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 1:38 PM
Author: 180 kitty cat

I am gay

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42377484)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 3:36 PM
Author: shaky racy ticket booth pervert

great thread

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42378176)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 3:39 PM
Author: mustard electric people who are hurt

Shitty writing is putting too much into one sentence.

A and B were driving in the X area. [query: are they both driving separate cars?] C driving D passed them.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42378186)



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Date: April 30th, 2021 8:29 PM
Author: Diverse crackhouse

A and C, drivers, were in different cars, driving through area X, and with them were B and D, passengers; B was with A while D was with C; A and B passed by C and D.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42379691)



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Date: May 2nd, 2021 12:50 PM
Author: Diverse crackhouse



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42387061)



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Date: May 23rd, 2021 3:44 PM
Author: Diverse crackhouse



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42509184)



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Date: May 2nd, 2021 12:36 PM
Author: Buff multi-colored piazza feces

Where are we on this? Thank

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#42386977)



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Date: February 22nd, 2022 10:06 AM
Author: Bossy mental disorder

As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C in which D was a passenger.

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#44008916)



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Date: February 25th, 2022 1:44 PM
Author: medicated yellow kitchen goal in life

OP, does this help?

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#44032743)



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Date: June 22nd, 2022 9:32 AM
Author: Arousing cruel-hearted black woman principal's office

i don't think anyone reads shitlaw shitpaper so it doesn't matter. aren't state court judges borderline retarded?

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#44722512)



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Date: April 19th, 2026 12:23 PM
Author: Pet Relief Area



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#49827186)



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Date: April 19th, 2026 12:42 PM
Author: UN peacekeeper

"and containing D as" -> "in which D was", otherwise fine

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#49827205)



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Date: April 19th, 2026 1:15 PM
Author: tubby spastic 11yo playing in toddler section

Lots of helpful suggestions in this thread but I’m not sure we’ve got it figured out just yet. Let’s put a pin in it and move on. OP: what’s the next sentence?

(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#49827228)



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Date: April 19th, 2026 2:57 PM
Author: Pet Relief Area



(http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2#49827363)